ohh snap = pwn
jeg better make a song about janny
yes because when I was in 10th grade I knew I was going to buy a drum set 3 years later and get in a band 5 years later and write a song:bloated:.Oh well…shes one load that should have been swallowed…can’t blame me that shes a smelly old cunt rag.
I said it needed work…i did it in a vry short amount of time…just trying to get a general opinion…so far is mixed lol.
waiting on janny…
Fix your Title so it says what you intended it to say…
VENGEANCE
Once you clean up the lyrics a bit, you have to get a beat/melody. Once you do that, you need a chorus or the song will be a poem with music.
c’mon ruby no ya didn’t
Since Jeg likes to rhyme and Janny disses him like its a crime,I think its about time we turn this into a battle rap,excuse me I must go crap…be right back.
…oh snap
youre probably a little better than john lennon
awwwwwwwwwwwwww… I’m sorry your song blows, JEG.
I’m sorry for YOU mostly. and sorry that you know the word “cunt rag” and feel that you have to use it often to prove something to the world.
maybe someday, your writing will improve.
Sometimes it’s necessary to correct someone’s spelling to keep them from looking like an idiot. Maybe I am barking up the wrong tree. :gotme:
nah…sometimes the tree is just too damn tall, and they have their head in the clouds. 
IMO: the lyrics rhyme well, but are kinda cheesy. But then again, what metal/hardcore/punk lyrics aren’t cheesy?
*m, i read that wrong - i thought that You fixed it, not that you were asking him to
<— can’t even find the right tree to bark up, takes big sweaty dumps, can’t read
I know my spelling was off…i didint use spell checker, i posted it up in a hurry cuz i was on my way out.
these punk lyrics are far from cheesy.
^^ bad religion good band
Overall for a start, good song, but it definately needs a chorus line, and Lamb of gods general tempo would be too fast for this. If properly paced it could be very powerful but good start